Friday, March 21, 2008

my 1st attempt in writing short story....


In the beautiful evening, on a sandy beach and under the shade of tree there she was engrossed in the thoughts of the days filled with hilarity. it was the memoirs of her teenage which kept her engrossed .her beautiful eyes where showing the picture of her first love, her obsession towards life where everyday was joyous and full of life .

Her eyes were showing the memoirs of the days when she used to hangout with her mates on the busy street of kolkata. She used to eat pani puri with her friends. it was the day when they couldn’t resist laughing over that joke and then suddenly the eyes of her met with the other eye. it was the eye contact or was it the conversation through the eyes where silence was doing its work and lips were sealed. her eyes chose the one who is going to rule her heart. he the one who was mesmerized to see the beauty standing in front of him,in a simple dress with graceful look and that smile, that laugh of her distracted him from doing his work and then when his eyes saw the woman dressed in a red salwar suit holding the pani puri in the hands and chucking with her friends, he forgot everything for a moment.his pain,his tension,his job every damn thing was lost for a moment and when those eyes met with another there was the love at first sight. she went away from there and the story thus ended there. He, who was waiting for the girl to come again but it, was their final meeting. the girl never came back…….it was their love at first sight.

“Let’s go mom, what are you thinking?” her daughter shouted and tried to wake her up.

“Nothing let’s go”. She was now a woman, who had a beautiful family, a little daughter to look after and a caring husband who could give her the warmth and support. she went away from that beach and the memoirs of her love faded away because she was living in a present world. A world, which is moving with a great pace. A world where it takes a second to say, “I love you”…a world where the real romance is somehow getting blurred.

12 comments:

Kenneth said...

I guess thats wat ppl with wisdom mean wen they say, "life is filled with beautiful moments of nostalgia"....

Rashi V said...

aww!! I wish it ended better but then again you dont always get what you want!! :) More realistic!! Keep up the good work!!

abymittal said...

true loves gets back to u...it sounds bookish..but its a fact!!

Matangi Mawley said...

I liked the ending.. it was more realistic!

C R D said...

nice story...however i would'nt really call that love..love does'nt happen at sight..and not at first sight definitely. only lust happens at sight.
love happens only when u know a person well and ur sure that you wanna spend the rest of ur life with that person. here, the 2 dint even share a word with each other, so it was just attraction and nothing else. nice story though.

keep writing

Chris
www.crissdude.blogspot.com

Saju Muthalaly said...

Very good indeed!

kanika said...

nice story and nice ending keep it up gud work man...

Dragon said...

impresive work dude..must say bout it..

Arjun said...

Hey Saurav, u r too good for ur age man ....
I too believe that was just lust and not love...
But no credit stolen....Neat piece of work..
Keep Posting..

Cheers..!!
Arjun

Dragon said...

nice work there..i am impressed with the ending

Vinayak said...

It was a nice story and I liked the last line.The story was filled with beautiful moments.
Keep it up

Gagan said...

interesting one !!!

the ending of the story was really nice !!